thesis statement:
people like shopping online due to the factors of convenience, price and much more choice.
1.topic sentence:
shopping online is convenience since consuners don't have to waste time and money on transportation.
- related to personal experience, it usually takes me half an hour to WALMART, mot mention the time needed for waiting for the bus,
- for the people who own cars,they still have to spend time driving and find place parking.otherwise, they have to pay the petrol cost.
shopping online is much cheaper than shopping in mall.
- you can always find the taxes and shipping free staffs on website.
- salers make more discounts since there are no additioal service fees.
- less worker needed, more income shared.
shopping online provides much more chioce.
- through online research, we can find anything we want without area limitation.
- buy the latest goods online
Haijia, I like your C&E outline. How about refining the thesis statement like this: "online shopping has become more popular because of the three following reasons: convenience, cheaper price, and various choices." Instead of saying 'price', if you say 'cheaper price', then your readers will see what's going on next. If you have any difficulties, let me know or drop by my office. I'm looking forward to your paper.
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